I liked the description of going to a concert. I think it was creative and helpful to have the concert shots playing while the speaker was saying the poem. I also think that the title “together” is a neat overall description of what happens at a concert. next time though maybe have the music in the background be a little softer so it does not overpower the speaker's voice. Very creative!
I enjoyed this poem and I think it was very creative that you added the video and everything worked as one. I had a hard time really focusing on the words of the poem because the music from the video was loud and the speaker's voice was soft. One thing you can change maybe is either adding the text under the video or having the speaker's voice louder/the video more quiet. Overall, I thought this poem was fun to hear, especially with the video playing behind it. This poem sort of takes you to a different place. Good job!
Hi!! I liked how you took your earlier poem and transformed it with the this performance poem! The colorful background videos really clarified the meaning behind the poem by creating a nice vibe and setting for the event described in the poem. One thing that I think you could improve is to either change the volume of your voice so that it is the primary focus of the video or to somehow match up the beat of the music with the beat of the poem. Another thing that might help would be to match up the emotional quality of the music and the reading voice- the music seems very exuberant compared to the solemn reading voice. Nice poem!!
Nahal - the performance of this poem really brought it to life! This was the first poem you ever wrote, and while the images in it allowed me to imagine it, putting into a performance along with a video created the image for me. It clarified the message of the poem, and made me feel as though I were really there. I liked the contrast between the crazy party feel of the music/video, and the stillness of your voice reading the poem. Great job! I guess my only criticism would be to speak a little louder next time. This is really awesome
Nahal - the performance of this poem really brought it to life! This was the first poem you ever wrote, and while the images in it allowed me to imagine it, putting into a performance along with a video created the image for me. It clarified the message of the poem, and made me feel as though I were really there. I liked the contrast between the crazy party feel of the music/video, and the stillness of your voice reading the poem. Great job! I guess my only criticism would be to speak a little louder next time. This is really awesome
Excellent job with the footage aspect of this video. It really makes the poem alive because as you are talking about a concert we're kind of experiencing one and we get to watch everyone moving as you describe it. Even though the setting you describe seems to have a lot of energy and hype, i think the mellow tone and slow delivery that you used was great because it's very reflective of whats going on. A fast, high pitched voiced wouldn't have a reflective feel to it. I would maybe make the music lower so your voice is whats more prominent because we still get the concert feel because we're watching it. Great job!
I liked the description of going to a concert. I think it was creative and helpful to have the concert shots playing while the speaker was saying the poem. I also think that the title “together” is a neat overall description of what happens at a concert. next time though maybe have the music in the background be a little softer so it does not overpower the speaker's voice. Very creative!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed this poem and I think it was very creative that you added the video and everything worked as one. I had a hard time really focusing on the words of the poem because the music from the video was loud and the speaker's voice was soft. One thing you can change maybe is either adding the text under the video or having the speaker's voice louder/the video more quiet. Overall, I thought this poem was fun to hear, especially with the video playing behind it. This poem sort of takes you to a different place. Good job!
ReplyDeleteHi!! I liked how you took your earlier poem and transformed it with the this performance poem! The colorful background videos really clarified the meaning behind the poem by creating a nice vibe and setting for the event described in the poem. One thing that I think you could improve is to either change the volume of your voice so that it is the primary focus of the video or to somehow match up the beat of the music with the beat of the poem. Another thing that might help would be to match up the emotional quality of the music and the reading voice- the music seems very exuberant compared to the solemn reading voice. Nice poem!!
ReplyDeleteNahal - the performance of this poem really brought it to life! This was the first poem you ever wrote, and while the images in it allowed me to imagine it, putting into a performance along with a video created the image for me. It clarified the message of the poem, and made me feel as though I were really there. I liked the contrast between the crazy party feel of the music/video, and the stillness of your voice reading the poem. Great job! I guess my only criticism would be to speak a little louder next time.
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Nahal - the performance of this poem really brought it to life! This was the first poem you ever wrote, and while the images in it allowed me to imagine it, putting into a performance along with a video created the image for me. It clarified the message of the poem, and made me feel as though I were really there. I liked the contrast between the crazy party feel of the music/video, and the stillness of your voice reading the poem. Great job! I guess my only criticism would be to speak a little louder next time.
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Excellent job with the footage aspect of this video. It really makes the poem alive because as you are talking about a concert we're kind of experiencing one and we get to watch everyone moving as you describe it. Even though the setting you describe seems to have a lot of energy and hype, i think the mellow tone and slow delivery that you used was great because it's very reflective of whats going on. A fast, high pitched voiced wouldn't have a reflective feel to it. I would maybe make the music lower so your voice is whats more prominent because we still get the concert feel because we're watching it. Great job!
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