This haiku is beautiful. It portrays nature in such a nice way. I am wondering if the poem is about the speaker changing herself? The descriptive words are great "sprinkled,chilled."
Hi! I really like so many things about this haiku! The word play of leaves and leave is great, and the words "hued" and "sprinkled" perfectly sum up the leaves in fall in a concise and quiet manner. I also like how you continued the sentence from the first to the second to the third line. The third line seemed a little off to me, I would suggest changing "the" to "this." Really beautiful haiku!
Nice job working in the two definitions of leave. It also creates repetition which I really enjoy in a poem. You captured the appearance of leaves really well because they do have different blotches of color on them at this time of year. Its quite impressive that you pick up on that and so successfully and beautifully put it into a poetic form. I would love to see a few more haiku's with this theme.
This haiku is beautiful. It portrays nature in such a nice way. I am wondering if the poem is about the speaker changing herself? The descriptive words are great "sprinkled,chilled."
ReplyDeleteHi! I really like so many things about this haiku! The word play of leaves and leave is great, and the words "hued" and "sprinkled" perfectly sum up the leaves in fall in a concise and quiet manner. I also like how you continued the sentence from the first to the second to the third line.
ReplyDeleteThe third line seemed a little off to me, I would suggest changing "the" to "this."
Really beautiful haiku!
Nice job working in the two definitions of leave. It also creates repetition which I really enjoy in a poem. You captured the appearance of leaves really well because they do have different blotches of color on them at this time of year. Its quite impressive that you pick up on that and so successfully and beautifully put it into a poetic form. I would love to see a few more haiku's with this theme.
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